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A Tango With Buenos Aires
As part of a group project in her fifth-grade Spanish class, Skylar has to produce a poem about Buenos Aires. While we were at Beyond Bread before her martial arts class this afternoon she decided to get a head start. This is what she came up with, in three minutes:
The city sweeps me,
the silver windows of its teeth flashing,
soaring through the clouds,
to a smooth, stone finger,
the obelisk,
pointing to a lost object,
not seen or heard,
past restaurants packed with
steaming steak,
through the Biblioteca Nacional
with dusty books
bursting with knowledge,
and still we pass,
a final dip,
a bow,
and the pancake sun
drips
butter on my velvet gown,
bleaching it into morning.
It's scary, watching how quickly this kind of language and form come to her. Scary in a good way, that is. The only problem is that I now have the task of helping her translate it into Spanish. Anybody know whether "pancake sun" will make sense?

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barca_k From: barca_k Date: April 21st, 2010 06:19 am (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
My take on Buenos Aires, done in real time in the only format that will allow me to write something awful but claim that it is at least pithy (timer ON!):

How many sylla-
-bles does Buenos Aires have-?
I'm sure I don't know.

Which would then go on to explain that, therefore, I can't write a haiku about it because I don't know how many syllables exactly are in the town's name, except I couldn't go on to explain that because it's a haiku & I was out of legally usable syllables.

Timer says it took eight minutes to write the poem. The explanation - actually took considerably less time. Anyway.

This kid of yours is nutty talented. The language, as you say... wow. She's going to have all the tools to do whatever she wants to do in life.
cbertsch From: cbertsch Date: April 21st, 2010 06:27 am (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
Ooh, I like your idea. It's witty and smart. And a lot more than I could manage in that time. Frankly, I'm not even sure how it's possible that she could write that fast. I know for a fact that the only ideas she had before she started writing were to mention the obelisk, steak, the library and the tango. All the language must have just come to her like the proverbial gift of the Muses. It's awesome and wonderful. But I do worry that if figurative writing comes that easy to her that she might one day suffer from the Prince problem, where the facility for creation becomes an impediment to sustained focus on any particular piece. Then again, she hasn't shown any tendency to lose concentration when working on her visual art, so I'm probably just expressing my own jealousy in saying that I'm "worried" about her talent!
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