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Does Collecting Make You Feel Dirty?
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frostedfuckhead From: frostedfuckhead Date: April 6th, 2005 01:51 am (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)

this is nice, i like it

the final image is quite effective.

i wonder about the lines: 'it has all hardened into act. the remainder penetrates our breath.' only because 'all' implies no remainder. perhaps i'm reading it wrong, as there is certainly room for another interpretation here.

but the image of choking on what remains of subtlety certainly is a great one.

keep em coming. i still have one to write tonight (i'm chilling a 22 of stone old guardian barley wine in preparation)
cbertsch From: cbertsch Date: April 6th, 2005 02:02 am (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)

Re: this is nice, i like it

Good point. "Possibility" was the antecedent I had in mind, but it's confusing. Better fix that. . .
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