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Occasional Poetry
Skylar has taken to writing poems during her free time at school, which is an extremely welcome development in our word-mad household. Here's one of her latest:
Shimmering, sparkling, a blaze of
White and blue cracking in a
Reflecting rainbow, making a maze
On my slippery surface, crackling as
Zig-zags form in a confusing
Way-- I am the ice.
Given all the gerunds she's using, we should probably read her some Leslie Scalapino!

I suppose this qualifies as una fantasia, when you consider how little experience she has had with the subject matter. It reminds me of teaching Robert Frost's poem "After Apple-picking" to my undergraduates, many of whom are baffled by the following lines because they have no concrete experience of the action depicted:
I cannot rub the strangeness from my sight
I got from looking through a pane of glass
I skimmed this morning from the drinking trough
And held against the world of hoary grass.
It melted, and I let it fall and break.
Although the former farmhouse I lived in as a child growing up in rural Pennsylvania no longer boasted any functional troughs, I loved to extract ice from puddles to get the distorted view Frost describes. I know Skylar would too, though it's unlikely that she will have the chance anytime soon.

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frostedfuckhead From: frostedfuckhead Date: January 5th, 2007 07:17 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
damn... that's an impressive poem for a little girl
cbertsch From: cbertsch Date: January 9th, 2007 04:13 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
What impresses me most is that it was sort of tossed off. She just wrote it as a way of passing the time.
oyster_shells From: oyster_shells Date: January 5th, 2007 08:07 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
how old is she again? impressive indeed. There is a wonderful book by Kenneth Koch called Rose How Did You Get So Red? that outlines lessons for giving children access to and experiance with good, complex poetry. I think it is a confunding form in this culture - as I'm sure most undergrads will attest to. The inhibition that young children have is probably actually really helpful in accessing poetry.
cbertsch From: cbertsch Date: January 9th, 2007 04:14 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
She turned 8 at the end of October. I'll have to hunt that book down. We've read to her from contemporary poetry and she really seems to get it in a way that most of my students don't. Maybe it's a genetic thing.
xxxpunkxgrrlxxx From: xxxpunkxgrrlxxx Date: January 5th, 2007 11:47 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
i'll agree with the other replies and call it impressive. nice use of enjambment :)

i've looked through pieces of ice like that!
cbertsch From: cbertsch Date: January 9th, 2007 04:16 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
I love holding up sheets of ice and looking through them as they start to melt. I even like holding them in my bare hands.

I liked the enjambment too, though I suspect that some of it was dictated by the space on the page. The last lines, however, were pretty clearly intended to be enjambed.
From: (Anonymous) Date: January 19th, 2007 04:15 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)

Rural Pennsylvania

Wow. Your daughter writes beautifully. You should show her this video. Reading that you grew up in rural Pennsylvania, I thought of this. The music with the imagery makes for a very poetic visual expression: http://travelistic.com/video/show/2018
cbertsch From: cbertsch Date: January 23rd, 2007 03:11 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)

Re: Rural Pennsylvania

Thanks! Sorry for the delay in unscreening this. I missed it the first time. Great video.
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