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Convenience Story - De File
Does Collecting Make You Feel Dirty?
cbertsch
cbertsch
Convenience Story
Along the way we stop for drinks. I choose
a Monster, wanting to avoid the fate
of Icarus, who had too many sweets, his
waxen wings dripping the waste of self, late

reminder of desire not withstood.
For you, a can of Coke. The real thing. Not
Diet. I smile at the irony, "Good.
I'm sick of--" Stop. It wouldn't be too wise,

invoking categories now. I'd blot
out the beauty of this moment and lose
my reason for being here, drinking lies

instead of sugar, so I won't berate
myself for failing to pass the test, should
it come, but sure this sipping is my lot.

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johnny9fingers From: johnny9fingers Date: February 13th, 2008 05:53 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
Like.
Rather a lot actually.
cbertsch From: cbertsch Date: February 14th, 2008 12:34 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
Thank you. It's a little confusing, but that was sort of the point, the tension between dreams and reality creating a muddle in between.
xxxpunkxgrrlxxx From: xxxpunkxgrrlxxx Date: February 13th, 2008 06:47 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
excellent.


i love references to icarus. there's a song by Thrice, called 'the melting point of wax', that does also.


also love the title.
cbertsch From: cbertsch Date: February 14th, 2008 12:37 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
Tried and true, that Icarus. I don't know why I associate him with a sugar rush. I guess because I think of wax as beeswax and therefore proximate to honey. And thank you about the title. I was rather proud -- perhaps rather too proud -- of it myself!
quuf From: quuf Date: February 13th, 2008 09:55 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
I love tricky rhyme schemes like this one.
cbertsch From: cbertsch Date: February 14th, 2008 12:35 pm (UTC) (LINK TO SPECIFIC ENTRY)
Me too. I mean, it's not that tricky in terms of end rhyme. But there's some internal rhyme that doubles the end rhyme in ways that feel "off," hopefully in a productive way.
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